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    dots Submission Name: Almost Time To Godots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 329/328/136
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 137
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1763



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    dotsAlmost Time To Godots
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    Guess you never really stuck around,
    All that long anywhere.
    I guess I should have known that you'd skip town.
    You always did, catch me unawares.
    Looking now at your debris,
    These trails of paper strewn across the floor.
    Towards an open door.

    Look at all you've gathered, all you own,
    Hold it in your hand, does it weigh more than a single feather?
    If the things you feel outsmart the things you know,
    It's almost time, it's almost time to go.

    I don't know if you struggled at the end.
    I know at times, you fought like hell.
    I know that sleep was never quite your friend.
    I hope that now, you're resting well.
    Old band names and alma maters,
    A patchwork quilt of people you have been,
    Tattooed on your skin.


    Look at all you've gathered, all you own,
    Hold it in your hand, does it weigh more than a single feather?
    If the things you feel outsmart the things you know,
    It's almost time, it's almost time to go.

    Think of people, places you have known,
    Sculpted out of sand.
    The tide's coming in and we're going nowhere.
    If your feet are still in shoes that they've outgrown,
    It's almost time, it's almost time to-
    Think of seed you've scattered and you've sown,
    All out of your hands,
    Lost in the wind like a little feather,
    And the things you feel outsmart the things you know.
    It's almost time, it's almost time, it's almost time, it's almost time,
    it's almost time, it's almost time to go.




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      Wow, this is pretty good. It makes me think of that so many people try to live their lives, filling it with so many things that don't really matter in the end. They live and die for nothing. They're always doing the same thing in a different way. the lines"The tide's coming in and we're going nowhere.
    If your feet are still in shoes that they've outgrown," are what makes me think of that. Good job at making me think.
    | Posted on 2007-12-24 00:00:00 | by lovedeathsdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one. It spoke of suicide or death to me in the fourth stanza in a beautiful way...
    "I don't know if you struggled in the end
    I know at times you fought like hell
    I know that sleep was never quite your friend.
    I hope that now, you're resting well."

    You had great rhyming in this piece, and the ending was my favorite part. I hope you keep writing with the hidden depth I found in this piece
    dancer-of-words
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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