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    dots Submission Name: Indifferencedots
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    Author: emochick13
    ASL Info:    16/female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 22/26/15
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    Indifference is my terminal disease
    It plagues my bones and causes my blood to freeze
    Pumped to my every extremity, each emotion is forced
    Everyday my worst fears are reinforced

    Faked smiles behind careless eyes
    Iíve found my Disguise

    Armor for my soul
    Self-protection takes its toll
    I forget how to feel
    And pretend I know how to heal

    At times my brain tells me I should react
    But I just canít respond to the facts
    There is no sadness, disappointment, or surprise
    However, I know every time, a part of me dies

    Fighting an uphill battle against myself
    My heart falls further into an ice shelf
    I watch my resilience wear thin
    It is inevitableÖ I always win.




    Submitted on 2007-12-18 22:27:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'm not sure what to say, though i do know that i can relate 100%. You laugh when your suppossed to laugh, you cry when your supposed to cry, everything is forced even the sparkle in your eye. i'm not gonna say i know exactly how you feel, because, really, no does. but people, me included have or are there.

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    i think your peom portraits that. you express everything with passion. most depressed poems are overreated, and i hate that, but this subject might be used a lot, but your choice in words are not, and that helps in the long run. Great job!!! ^_^

    Kayla
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i liked it i really relate to it im in a situation now were i just quit useing coke an herion an i should be happy but i feel more lost then ever i sit alone every day and have nothing left but my mind to eat away at me and my greatest fear relizied and im doing all of this not for my self but for someone that is unsure it seems pointless but i cant let go i think ur poem was intensly deep i could invision every thing u seid perfectly
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by bleeding_words | [ Reply to This ]


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