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    dots Submission Name: Why must you?dots
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    Author: Leila
    ASL Info:    19/female/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 98/85/18
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 795
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    Description:
       This is a really simple poem. Don't read deep into it - you'll be looking for something that's not there. I sort of wrote this poem in a state of bitterness - and like all emotions, it is not regulated by deep thought, thorough punctuation or big words.


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    dotsWhy must you?dots
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    Why must you say my name,
    when I really donít want you to?
    Why must you say anything at all?
    You always talk out of cue.

    Why do you ask me things
    Like to take a walk down the street?
    Then turn your back later
    And comment on what I eat

    Why must you open your ugly mouth?
    You rarely say something kind.
    Then laugh like raging thunder
    At anything wrong you can find.

    Why must I always hold my tongue
    When you have entered a room?
    With all the loud-mouthed dirt you talk,
    Maybe I should carry a broom

    Why do you think that pitiable thought:
    That the world revolves around you
    Because we all know thatís what you want
    I donít feel sorry for you (not anymore)




    Submitted on 2007-12-19 11:20:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It would seem to me that this is one friend that you could walk away from and never wind up missing a thing. By holding your tongue you just embolden his even more.

    Use the broom you mentioned to sweep him out of your life.
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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