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    dots Submission Name: singledots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1212
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 658



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    The HomeLess MillionAirs


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    dotssingledots
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    it comes down to you
    directions that we choose
    looking back on how we grew
    and time we chose to lose
    it's not like it was when we started
    so many gone --half hearted
    so tough
    so what
    it's known
    when it comes down to you
    we are- all alone

    we are-all alone

    we drive for miles
    no breaks
    fake smiles
    mistakes
    I'm so sorry
    no fucking worries
    we'll hit the shop--soon one day
    and get alot of what
    we never needed anyway

    we are-all alone


    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2007-12-19 11:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked your poem.For a few moments it made me think about the world ending and how we all have made mistakes.But.....thats just me but as I said I really enjoyed it.It speaks volumes without really trying.So well done

    the girl who cried wolf to much
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]


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