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Author: LameMansTerms ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713 /1012 /165 Words: 92

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it comes down to you directions that we choose looking back on how we grew and time we chose to lose it's not like it was when we started so many gone --half hearted so tough so what it's known when it comes down to you we are- all alone we are-all alone we drive for miles no breaks fake smiles mistakes I'm so sorry no fucking worries we'll hit the shop--soon one day and get alot of what we never needed anyway we are-all alone lamemansterms

Submitted on 2007-12-19 11:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I really liked your poem.For a few moments it made me think about the world ending and how we all have made mistakes.But.....thats just me but as I said I really enjoyed it.It speaks volumes without really trying.So well done the girl who cried wolf to much

| Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]

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