I have to be honest here, since you want to be a better writer as do everyone else. I think that it sounded too forceful. The rhymes seemed like you tried to make it rhyme too much. repetition of words at the ending of the poems are usually good, but this time it didn't work since it is such a simple word: there.
I really liked this line however because this is what I call a flow: With every age-told story
Made better by a lie
it sounded like you didn't try to hard and that it just poured out from your heart. I like the concept of "made better by a lie" because many times ppl lie to make things a little better than what things really are.
You should try to go further in detail or add metaphors or similes in your poems.
Overall, I think this was a good start. Keep writing. I hope to see more of your works in the future!