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Author: N0shin
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What is of him who has never loved?
What is of him who has never held a baby?
What is of him who has never cried?
And have we loved him?

What is of her who didn't walk on the sand;
bare footed
What is of her who hasn't danced in the waves;
trembling
What is of her who never kissed someone behind the willows;
chest heaving
And have we felt her?

What is of them who never held out a hand;
for us to hold
What is of them who never cried;
in our sorrows
What is of them who never embraced a child;
cold in the arms of that poor mother
And have we reached out to them?

what is of you when i want you by my side?
what is of you when i need your touch?
what is of you when i need the rain;
so that we can cry together

What is of you and me?




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  the best lines: "what is of you when i need the rain;
so that we can cry together"

well...cant tell if this is just a poem or ur feelings but considering both cases these are emotions that "I" am going thru now and it is surprising that it is "YOU" who has put these feelings on paper and not me.
So hopefully this answers the question u put forth in the last line of this poem....'cause "

WE FEEL THE SAME THINGS
AT MOMENTS WHICH ARE THE SAME...
AND FOR SUCH OVERPOWERING EMOTIONS...
OUR LOVE IS TO BLAME!

THIS IS WHAT WE ARE ALL ABOUT...
THIS IS HOW WE WILL BE...
I LOVE U AND U LOVE ME...AND
THIS IS "OF YOU AND ME!!!"
| Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  That was a very moving poem! I loved the lines..."what is of you when i need the rain;
so that we can cry together" Kind of reminds me of a poem I wrote called " Angels Cry?"
Anyway great write! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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