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    dots Submission Name: Tell Me All Your Secretsdots
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    Author: Leila
    ASL Info:    19/female/South Africa
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 98/85/18
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 151
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 847



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       Sometimes a job isn't just a job ... that's all I'm saying about this one.


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    dotsTell Me All Your Secretsdots
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    Tell me all your secrets, kind woman
    Let them collapse upon my lap
    Like little gems of twists and tales
    So I can fill my vacant pad

    Tell me all your troubles, my friend
    You and I can make history
    Though no-one will remember you
    Past tomorrow’s headline frenzy

    Hold not back on the juicy bits
    So I can ride a wave of fame
    All the way to the big, bad bank
    Concealing the doubt and the shame

    If you must know, I do not chose
    To play this game of lose and lose
    With this dogged passion, I am
    Here lies your chance to be my muse

    I could tell you my own stories
    But I don’t think you would believe
    For when you choose this life, its done
    You’ve sold your heart to masses, thieves.




    Submitted on 2007-12-19 14:03:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting subject. I get the sense of a Therapist using their (famous?) patient for their own fame/fortune. I'm sure there's a hidden message, and that's what makes this write so compelling. Also, I like the way it's written and how it sounds when read aloud. I enjoyed it.

    4th Stanza - one misspelling -> chose should be choose.

    Good work!

    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by Wild Flower | [ Reply to This ]
      I will start by telling you that I truly liked the ideas contained within the lines of this piece. I do feel though that by forcing some of your rhyme scheme you take away a little bit of the bite of the overall experience. One should always be very careful when rhyming for any hint of forcing is immediately exposed.
    | Posted on 2007-12-19 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]



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