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    dots Submission Name: foal friendsdots
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    Author: weepingwillow
    ASL Info:    23/f/Brighton
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 38/75/35
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
    Total Views: 810
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    Bytes: 528



    Description:
       initial muse.ill write a new one after friday!


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    dotsfoal friendsdots
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    flamenco lull and stringy pop
    true vibrations carry me off
    spanish eyes splinter
    my last trend,
    thicken my rims and fuel my whim
    cause this absorbption
    british pretence is burned,love.
    deeper and down
    i whirr as a feather caught in minicyclone
    get a bit crushed like a runaway cornflake
    and fluff back up through your garden gate
    all smiles
    a new biscuit rolled from old dough
    take my time:
    your mind is wild, like scottish snow.




    Submitted on 2007-12-19 14:49:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Being a native Scot, the snow up there sure is wild !!!!

    Well written by you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-07-02 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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