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    dots Submission Name: Apple & Cinnamon Oatmealdots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 689
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 925



    Description:
       Just something that little things inspire. Quick piece.


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    dotsApple & Cinnamon Oatmealdots
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    I know I can count on you.
    And that's saying something.
    For what we've gone through...
    You still mean so much to me.

    I know I can count on you.
    Opening my sleep-filled eyes
    and I will see you.
    A smile always at your lips.

    I know I can count on you
    to understand my awkward morning language.
    There are no words, but a slight pressure on chords
    to squeak amiably in your direction.

    I know I can count on you
    to leave for work at the same time
    everyday.
    And know that I won't be able to sleep again.

    I know I can count on you
    to leave your empty bowl for oatmeal
    on the bed-side drawers.
    And in between warm blankets, I will grin.

    I know I can count on
    Apple and Cinnamon Oatmeal bowls
    in the bedroom we share.




    Submitted on 2007-12-19 15:32:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It shows the softer side of a relationship well...I enjoyed it.

    The offbeat stanzas really draw your reader in.
    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome.good poem.like the way it edges into the subject matter and catches the eye.will read another one.
    | Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by to-wit | [ Reply to This ]


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