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    dots Submission Name: Shaking The Dustdots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       Want to see your true mantle ? Shake the dust !


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    dotsShaking The Dustdots
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    To live in the woods of desire
    In respect to ego's aspire
    Is a wondrous hunt for the peer
    within to make all things so clear
    As to which trees to sit beneath
    And which to forsake in relief
    when burdens lay with desire

    There is that wind tickling at leaves
    Like a living soul that breathes
    Upon ego's tilted game
    listening which way the wind
    While feasting on thoughted dreams
    Empty as a vacant feel
    Of how the otherwise can live.

    This is the journey emptying soul
    That aspirants make as goal
    In decide which fork in the road
    Can give a mean to life's true code
    Breaking through those swamps of desire
    To change that which is in the fire
    Looking at ashes left behind.





    Submitted on 2007-12-19 23:37:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece a lot. It depicts having a crush very well. At the end, are you saying that you have to go beyond the crush, and see that it is a waste? or sometime else altogether?

    It seems like you are saying that most of the time, to follow a crush means you are turning your back on others. Sorry if this is way off the intended meaning.
    But yeah, i enjoyed it very much, the flow feels a little awkward in a few lines, but not enough to cite specific lines.

    thanks for posting it.
    Guermo
    | Posted on 2008-02-01 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]


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