Stuck in my head -------------------------------------------
Every touch and every whisper
makes my mind scream
'just kiss her
she's the girl of your dreams
why can't you see that
you're in love with that girl'
i study your smell
and i study the way
the light glistens in your eyes
i can feel your hair against my cheek
your leg wrapped with mine in the sheets
our arms and hands softening to the touch
and weary to cross
our eyes locked and our whispers
in each other's ears only for one to hear
laughter, flirting, lying in bed
hello stranger, you're stuck in my head
Wow... I don't even care that this piece doesn't rhyme, it's beautiful. Rarely do I get the pleasure of coming across a love poem from a guy's perspective, and I'm very glad I stumbled upon this one. Normally I would suggest more detail, but for some reason the vaguenss of this piece adds more interest for the reader.
I congratulate you on a job well done, and I hope to see more from you!
~Melissa~
It doesn't rhyme, but it kind of flows... I really liked it because you put something so beautiful into words. Love is really hard to write about, and you managed to capture a part of it. Good job!
Submission Name: Stuck in my head
