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    dots Submission Name: Stuck in my headdots
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    Author: Midnight Shadow
    ASL Info:    22/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 47/151/126
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsStuck in my headdots
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    Every touch and every whisper
    makes my mind scream
    'just kiss her
    she's the girl of your dreams
    why can't you see that
    you're in love with that girl'
    i study your smell
    and i study the way
    the light glistens in your eyes
    i can feel your hair against my cheek
    your leg wrapped with mine in the sheets
    our arms and hands softening to the touch
    and weary to cross
    our eyes locked and our whispers
    in each other's ears only for one to hear
    laughter, flirting, lying in bed
    hello stranger, you're stuck in my head




    Submitted on 2007-12-20 01:14:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... I don't even care that this piece doesn't rhyme, it's beautiful. Rarely do I get the pleasure of coming across a love poem from a guy's perspective, and I'm very glad I stumbled upon this one. Normally I would suggest more detail, but for some reason the vaguenss of this piece adds more interest for the reader.

    I congratulate you on a job well done, and I hope to see more from you!
    ~Melissa~
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]
      It doesn't rhyme, but it kind of flows... I really liked it because you put something so beautiful into words. Love is really hard to write about, and you managed to capture a part of it. Good job!
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by emanol | [ Reply to This ]


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