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    dots Submission Name: The After Laughter...it wasn't too funnydots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 912
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1389



    Description:
       just a little poem about me and my dog Max--he is so cool!--lol
    njoy fuckers!


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    dotsThe After Laughter...it wasn't too funnydots
    -------------------------------------------


    “The After Laughter…
    It Wasn’t Too Funny”

    --
    Stuck in this rectangle box
    Fucking death
    It really sux
    I aint getting out
    I wont be going on
    My body will lie here
    And my soul is already gone
    --
    Dieing the other day
    Meeting my maker
    What would I say to her?
    It didn’t matter…
    She just laughed
    And turned and walked away.
    --
    If I knew what I know now
    And somehow let it all go
    It would have come back around
    So now the only sound
    Are worms in and out my eyes
    Seeing is believing
    And death
    Makes me want to be alive
    --
    no no no no
    I don’t want to die
    It’s not a better place
    no no no no

    --
    No amazing grace
    Not a familiar face
    The after life I never found
    Not a single trace
    --
    no no no no
    I don’t want to die
    It’s not a better place
    no no no no

    --
    It all ends
    When they put you in the ground
    --

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2007-12-20 01:21:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Freakin' awesome! It's totally unique...I've never seen or heard of a poem about someone being in a coffin and wishing they had just lived life out. Sweet concept.
    I'm never committing suicide now......:)
    dancer-of-words
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
      I did enjoy it. love the title but i wasn't expecting it to be about death. All the better though. I liked the subject as much as the witty language.
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]


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