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The After wasn't too funny

Author: LameMansTerms
ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
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Words: 191
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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just a little poem about me and my dog Max--he is so cool!--lol
njoy fuckers!

The After wasn't too funny

“The After Laughter…
It Wasn’t Too Funny”

Stuck in this rectangle box
Fucking death
It really sux
I aint getting out
I wont be going on
My body will lie here
And my soul is already gone
Dieing the other day
Meeting my maker
What would I say to her?
It didn’t matter…
She just laughed
And turned and walked away.
If I knew what I know now
And somehow let it all go
It would have come back around
So now the only sound
Are worms in and out my eyes
Seeing is believing
And death
Makes me want to be alive
no no no no
I don’t want to die
It’s not a better place
no no no no

No amazing grace
Not a familiar face
The after life I never found
Not a single trace
no no no no
I don’t want to die
It’s not a better place
no no no no

It all ends
When they put you in the ground


Submitted on 2007-12-20 01:21:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Freakin' awesome! It's totally unique...I've never seen or heard of a poem about someone being in a coffin and wishing they had just lived life out. Sweet concept.
I'm never committing suicide now......:)
| Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
  I did enjoy it. love the title but i wasn't expecting it to be about death. All the better though. I liked the subject as much as the witty language.
| Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]

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