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    dots Submission Name: two poems in a headcolddots
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    Author: Aaron Felix
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 162/183/93
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1090
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1025



    Description:
       Thinking about thinking about thinking about life after college. Not reflective of a general mood.


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    dotstwo poems in a headcolddots
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    "People, People"

    Restless people love cereal
    bars, and swimming in
    aqueducts,

    and other flights of fancy.

    Art
    People are endlessly
    antagonizing the demons
    that spit them out,
    they kick the shins,

    they beg the commercials
    for mercy.

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    "Direction" or:
    '(anticipation of a crisis, mid-life)'

    Everything that I walk on groans.

    The crackers in the pantry are starting
    to rust.

    How long do I have to wait
    until purpose comes and
    jabs its fingers in my eyes ?

    Some people have the ability
    to push a question mark on its side
    and continue the line so that it looks
    like the infinity symbol,

    I smoke so much
    my doctor
    gives me twenty years.





    Submitted on 2007-12-20 02:51:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well i just commented on your recent piece...and decided...i wonder what other kind of stuff he writes since i was clueless beyond wonder on that one....i love this one i have to say...and i really like the stanza

    "Some people have the ability
    to push a question mark on its side
    and continue the line so that it looks
    like the infinity symbol,"

    thats a great way of saying some people are just able to go through life weith more confidence than others always knowing where they are going ...then there are others who who just aren;t sure...or they are afraid...or undecided...i love it...i can defently relate to this piece....i've felt this way...not sure what to do with my life...i've started college...quit college....now i'm going back...lol...moved thousand of times...though i'm getting better....sometimes it just takes others longer to see what they want....and the part about the cigarettes...lol...i just laughed because i smoke beyond way to much....purps
    | Posted on 2008-03-13 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      :) This reminds me of how I used to feel before I came to a religion-(Christianity,) and where the world is going.....I like this poem because it describes how if you really stopped pushing the fast-forward button and looked at life you'd realize it was pointless....
    dancer-of-words
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
      This is bl*ody hilarious! Wow, what an engaging piece. Lots of stuff to chew over, & I will revisit it again & again happily.

    V creative. Bravo ;OP

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    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by biska | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. The part about turning the question mark into the infinity symbol is incredible. And... I am too tired to say anything else. This is a very lame comment. But it's lame just for you! :)
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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