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    dots Submission Name: nudedots

    Author: Myopic
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 31/58/63
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    you were on a
    man handled carriage
    studded with glimmering gold
    shining like a sun
    solemn in peace as i become
    filled with the rooting vegetation of any
    of the men that stare at you, blinding me,
    staring at
    the sun.
    causing the eclipse, you force your eyes to me.
    you are a decoration for the populace
    like a toy that comes
    to life when people are away.
    all there is
    is to be
    your away.
    you stand in front of them all, clothed in
    extravagant jade and silk,
    face powdered by the inclination to let people use
    their imagination -
    a defense tactic.
    you throw off your clothes,
    skin blue
    with cold,
    leaving wonder for all those people right
    there crumpled on the wooden ancient
    floor as you sprint away from it
    and it's jade and silk shadows.
    as you sneak around the corner, there is he, sitting,
    blinded by you, the sun,
    admiring the new wonders in darkness which
    shroud over his eyes,
    you burn through all his senses as you stand in
    front of him, existing.
    tears, the new sense, he resurfaces like a
    baby bird hatching from an egg,
    crying for help with confusion and fear as he slowly learns
    what it feels like to feel.
    as you take his prehensile hand,
    the long prehensile souls
    of two
    collections of particles
    and pixels on a page like the leaves
    to the trees and the
    trees to the forest,
    feel the void of the universe being
    stretched, filled up with the pressure of infinite
    mathematical paradoxes as love contradicts physics.

    Submitted on 2007-12-20 05:05:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's beautiful!
    It is, to me, the relationship between artist and muse. The sun and the moon. The sun giving light to the moon. The moon getting selfish and causing an eclipse.

    It's beautiful. Really.
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]
      It is long, but there are alot of good images through out. It follows the storyline nicely without becoming swallowed by the wording or tecnique.
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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