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    dots Submission Name: Bloody Lovedots

    Author: Xena
    ASL Info:    17/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 24/20/22
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 628
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I kinda wrote this in my sleep so tell me if ya like it

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    dotsBloody Lovedots

    Save me from this evil abyss which slowly consumes my soul. Only one man can save me. He brightens my days and nights. His eyes shine like the sun yet glow like the moon. His arms fall weak to my touch but come strong for my protection. His kisses so passionate his hugs so warming. As we walk together his hand glides into mine. If he hasn’t seen me for a day he acts as if he hasn’t seen me for a year. As my soul slowly sinks, I only think of him, of his last moments. His bloody hand upon my face trying to wipe thy tears. His eyes shone so brightly as he said his last words to me,” days come and go…. But… my... feelings…for……you….are…..fo…r...ev...er. He dies there in my arms; he died protecting me from a thief, a thief who had concealed a gun from sight. When he had stepped in front of me he was shot, still standing, he tried to shoot again but something backfired blinding him. After he died filled with grieve, anger, and evil thoughts I picked the gun up, pointing it at the man who had shot my beloved, I shot him in his heart. A heart he had broken, I felt no remorse I only heard one thing, it was the sound of the gun. I fell down onto the ground and died next to my shining star.

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      i really love how you incorperate song lyrics in your writings.
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