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    dots Submission Name: Picture Lovedots

    Author: Xena
    ASL Info:    17/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 24/20/22
    Words: 300
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsPicture Lovedots

    As I lay awake one bright night I slowly reach under my pillow and pull a picture out. I look into the beautiful unmoving eyes of the boy who was on it, for reasons unknown tears slowly began to fall down my face. As I sit up in my bed I still stare at the picture trying to understand how, how can a boy make me feel this way? How can I love someone who does not love me? He puts so much pain in my heart. But yet I still profess my undying love to him, still as tears flood my face. He knows of my love for him yet he still walks away. My heart still leaps every time I see his face and my hands still shake when I here his voice. From the moment our hands touched I new in my heart I have found the one. The one my heart so dearly desires. He will be leaving soon, he may leave my sight and my touch but there will always be a room in my heart for him. As I put the picture back under my pillow as I stare up into the sky. I dry my tears and say,” My happy ending is gone but thanks for acting like you cared, my only comfort now lays in the dark forever alone.” But my seeking heart still looks towards another day I may see him, but my mind says to forget him for all we hang by is
    False and lost hope. As I lay back down I still do not understand this thing that so many people enjoy yet I suffer from it, this thing… called love. As I fall asleep my dreams are all the same... nothing but a black abyss.

    Submitted on 2007-12-20 14:06:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there are so many people who can relate to this kind of a feeling.
    And more often than not its sohard to put down in words. you have a nice flow to your writing and it was easy to follow.
    it's very generic but its something people can easily put a face and a name to.
    good job.
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by wordofsurrender | [ Reply to This ]

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