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    dots Submission Name: The Abyssdots
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    Author: Xena
    ASL Info:    17/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 24/20/22
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       Part 2 My cousin and I wrote this one


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    dotsThe Abyssdots
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    ssI slowly fall into the abyss, nobody to save me. My thoughts flash through my mind and a smile spreads across my face as a boy enters my mind. He was the man of my dreams, the boy who was there. His existence led to my fall. His smile and eyes where there in my mind. As he looked at me the smile remained on my face, and then as I zoomed out of his reach, another girl came into view. She was holding his hand and my smile vanished. He looked at me and said,” You waited to long,” They vanished from my sight, I kept falling and he wouldn’t come back into my mind. He had known of my affections for him and yet he chose another. Tears flooded my face and hatred filled my heart. It wasn’t fair, I wanted him, and we were meant to be. It wasn’t her place to ruin true love. I fell and nobody would miss me or long for me, to be by my side. As I fell I began to long for the bottom then the hurt inside my heart would cease. Then the end was in sight and I braced myself for the end. When I finally hit covers flew around me. My eyes opened and I realized it was a dream. As my heart raced, I laid on my pillow. My deepest, darkest fear had been realized… There was another.




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      wow this was good,My favorite line was his existence led to my downfall,I think that sums it up,This really explains how painful love and loss can hurt.
    I do enjoy your style,keeps you interested till the end,which is good for those of us A.D.D.
    Kids.
    you do have Talent and I cant wait toRead More.
    Thank you,
    Spirithorse, AKA Diablo
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      This is skillful, and well told, Melissa! It captures the intense mood created by dreams, and masterfully told an excellent story in verse! Nice going, gal!
    | Posted on 2007-12-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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