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    dots Submission Name: There to you at alldots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 422
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 550
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2570



    Description:
       In the heartache of it all, this was one of the outcomes.


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    dotsThere to you at alldots
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    Was I just a game to you?
    A little thing to enjoy?
    Was I just another bad habit?
    Addictive and just wanting more.
    Did you just want me for kicks
    Or just for the easy sex.
    I was just useless to your heart and mind
    I was just a little something for your spare time.

    Chorus
    If this was a dream
    I would be living a nightmare
    If these are my hopes
    Then theres nothing more to spare
    Theres sometimes a distance
    A gap between us all
    But sometimes I even wonder
    If I was there to you at all

    Was I the perfect drug?
    Addictive but sometimes useful
    Useful for sorting out your troubles
    But hearing none of mine at all.
    Is this the payback
    For all the things I've ever done
    Is this my imprisonment
    For all my crimes against your will

    Chorus
    If this was a dream
    I would be living a nightmare
    If these are my hopes
    Then theres nothing more to spare
    Theres sometimes a distance
    A gap between us all
    But sometimes I even wonder
    If I was there to you at all

    If this was a dream
    I would be living a nightmare
    If these are my hopes
    Then theres nothing more to spare
    Theres sometimes a distance
    A gap between us all
    But sometimes I even wonder
    If I was there to you at all

    Instrumental

    I'm feeling the pain
    Is it time to let me go?
    I can't take this much longer
    Leave me out in the cold
    Just set me free
    Let me be
    If anytime now I'm asleep
    You've gotta just wake me up

    Chorus
    If this was a dream
    I would be living a nightmare
    If these are my hopes
    Then theres nothing more to spare
    Theres sometimes a distance
    A gap between us all
    But sometimes I even wonder
    If I was there to you at all

    If this was a dream
    I would be living a nightmare
    If these are my hopes
    Then theres nothing more to spare
    Theres sometimes a distance
    A gap between us all
    But sometimes I even wonder
    If I was there to you at all

    Was I there for you?
    Can I even cry for you?
    Or would none of it be true
    Set aside my past
    Just let me live
    Leave me alone
    Wake me up
    Now I realise my place




    Submitted on 2007-12-20 14:53:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really deep and meaningful. I like the part about comparing love to drugs it is a great comparison to make, and you did it in an original fashion. It tells and epic story of love and ends in a great way. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by Diomedes44 | [ Reply to This ]


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