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    dots Submission Name: Dead to this heartdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 404
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 556
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2406



    Description:
       The second song in my own depression.
    This one is for a person I knew a long time ago.


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    dotsDead to this heartdots
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    I was too young to know
    The pain that you could give
    Slowly you'd fill me with feelings
    The pain that you left me with
    No joy but sorrow
    The shed of a tear
    Hoping you'd leave me fallen
    With thoughts that I hold dear.

    Chorus
    Catch me now as I fall from a star
    Walk so near but you're still too far
    Do you really want me broken
    To look at my face blood red
    You only wanted to use me
    And now in my heart you are dead

    I was stupid, maybe so
    But mindful for my age
    And in these years of searching
    Theres nothing in here but rage
    No sadness, no pain
    No happiness left inside
    I only hoped that you'd notice me
    You can't say that I haven't tried.

    Chorus
    Catch me now as I fall from a star
    Walk so near but you're still too far
    Do you really want me broken
    To look at my face blood red
    You only wanted to use me
    And now in my heart you are dead

    Catch me now as I fall from a star
    Walk so near but you're still too far
    Do you really want me broken
    To look at my face blood red
    You only wanted to use me
    And now in my heart you are dead

    Instrumental

    Catch me now as I fall from a star
    Walk so near but you're still too far
    Do you really want me broken
    To look at my face blood red
    You only wanted to use me
    And now in my heart you are dead

    Letters were sent
    Sealed with pain
    Nothing for years
    Can you see the shame
    Hide in anger
    Become this creature
    Hide in the dark
    With this vengeful heart
    I'm nothing of the old
    This is what darkness brings

    Chorus
    Catch me now as I fall from a star
    Walk so near but you're still too far
    Do you really want me broken
    To look at my face blood red
    You only wanted to use me
    And now in my heart you are dead

    Catch me now as I fall from a star
    Walk so near but you're still too far
    Do you really want me broken
    To look at my face blood red
    You only wanted to use me
    And now in my heart you are dead




    Submitted on 2007-12-20 15:01:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh how i wish i could here a tune with this, i can definetly see this becoming a real song. it holds so much a emotion, so much pain. it just makes you want to keep reading. Great job, i loved it

    Cry
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]
      wow!! this is SO powerfull. you did a really good job writing this. keep up thte good work
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      These are really good... There filled with such rage and sorrow.. I like it alot...

    Letters were sent
    Sealed with pain
    Nothing for years
    Can you see the shame
    Hide in anger
    Become this creature
    Hide in the dark
    With this vengeful heart
    I'm nothing of the old
    This is what darkness brings

    Really hit me.. It sounds like you're trying to reach someone but they're not responding to you. This makes you angry and depressed.. I know how that is and many people can relate. Why must reaching others be so difficult?... Anyway good write..
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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