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    dots Submission Name: Memores Actidots
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    Author: Nihilum
    ASL Info:    17/M
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 8/10/6
    Words: 465
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       A sestina I made for my modern poetry class.


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    dotsMemores Actidots
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    Remember when we had the chance to sleep
    Beneath that vivid blanket of ominous stars?
    We could almost reach out and grab one to keep
    Put it in our pocket; take it out in a time to cover up scars
    I doubt I could ever forget that night
    As we watched the sun and the moon playfully fight

    You met me at a time where I was altered by scars
    But you helped them heal with your words that I still keep
    Close to my conscience and far from the stars
    You met me when nightmares were the kings of my sleep
    You replaced this anxiety with thoughts of your smile at night
    It became apparent; for these things, for you, I had to fight

    Do you remember that nefarious November morning, where had our first fight?
    We bickered like children, revealing those past scars
    I spent that evening digging for words to show my discontent—I lost hours of sleep
    But every thought of you only reminded me of those stars
    We gazed at, where we promised to keep
    Those solemn secrets we whispered at night

    You and I, we were on top—we scoffed at that empty fight
    I swear, during those days, I thought I could touch those stars
    They were closer than ever then; in person and in my sleep
    For the first time in my life, I could hardly see my scars
    Bliss waited for me everywhere I went, anything you said, I would keep
    Repeating it in my head, over and over, just to hear your voice at night

    Time flew by when we had fun, and neither of us could see our scars
    But we could both see that dying flame, as much as we wanted to keep
    It alive with false words of affection; I took you outside to see the stars
    But there was nothing in the sky; nothing but alarming clouds that would not sleep
    I realized then that the nemesis of love is time, we couldn’t fight
    This daunting truth, you and I, so we severed those ties that night

    But time has not been considerate enough to let me sleep
    Without seeing flashes of your face with images of stars
    I’m involuntarily hanging by a thread; and I can’t help but keep
    Your voice on repeat—I guess the healing of these scars
    Comes at a price: the loss of you; and I want you to know that the night
    Sky will never be the same since I fell for you; I always fight

    Back the tears of nostalgia whenever I lose sleep gazing at stars
    But in hindsight, I would much rather keep my scars
    And suffer at night with you than deteriorate alone, with no will to fight




    Submitted on 2007-12-20 21:37:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a beautiful poem. Favorite.

    You executed the sestina format quite well.
    | Posted on 2007-12-23 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]
      The title confused me a little, but I as soon as I started reading I was hooked. A sestina was the way to go. I especially like how you used the stars and the sky as symbols for the relationship.
    | Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by Sparkster | [ Reply to This ]



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