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    dots Submission Name: for sean (pt. 2)dots
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    Author: freeradical
    ASL Info:    22/feline/london
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 311/405/63
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1066
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsfor sean (pt. 2)dots
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    i wish i could tell you
    everything i hold
    inside me.

    that we could lie together
    on dark and lonely
    nights,
    and i could impart
    every hidden passion,
    secret desire,
    hidden motive
    to your unreadable face.

    i wish i could fall asleep
    beside you
    and wake up
    beside you
    and live
    beside you.

    i wish
    you would be proud enough
    to hold my hand
    as we walked down the street
    and laugh at my wit
    and sass.

    instead,
    you are two hundred miles away
    dating a seventeen year old
    who apparently
    makes you happy.

    and i live my life smiling,
    if not because i'm with you
    because the last time i saw you,
    you hugged me so close
    and whispered
    that you missed my laugh.

    i just wish you missed me enough
    to do something about it,

    i wish you missed me enough
    to love me.

    or loved me enough,
    to miss me.

    i die for you.
    i would, i could,
    i probably will.

    you ruin me.

    and i would rather be ruined
    by you
    than loved
    by anyone else.




    Submitted on 2007-12-20 23:43:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      or wait; is it unreadable because of the dark?
    OK. gotcha.
    this is super good.
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]
      things get really rough after that "instead", eh?
    this is so sweet and dark at the same time.
    i am wondering about the "unreadable face" line though. i guess i just can't wrap my mind around how unreadable is a good thing and if its not a good thing then why do you wish to fall asleep and wake up next to this person.?
    the lines; "i just wished you missed me enough to do something about it," sums it up doesn't it?
    powerful.
    the sincerity in these words really jumps out at the reader.(at least this reader).
    good stuff. i like.
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]


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