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    dots Submission Name: Curiositydots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 28/26/26
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 795
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 754



    Description:
       Mushy poetry. Part one of two.

    It's stilted and fractured partially in honor of the emotion/feeling it represents and partially because that was all I could come out with at the time.


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    dotsCuriositydots
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    I never thought Iíd love you,
    I never thought Iíd love.

    But you picked me up,
    And proved me wrong,
    Youíre the only one.

    I didnít know what to say to you,
    I never know what to say.

    You knew my shame,
    Were friendly with my sins,
    But finally, cared for me just the same.

    I didnít think we could make it,
    I wasnít sure weíd ever start.

    But you were willing to wait,
    For something I couldnít see,
    A twist of fate I hadn't counted on.

    I'm not sure how we got here.
    I'm not sure for how long.

    We'll be here together,
    But for now I'm glad we are.




    Submitted on 2007-12-21 02:01:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the sentiment of the poem and I am sure that it means a lot to you and to whom you wrote the poem. As far as mechanics go it feels choppy to me and when lines are coupled like that I expect either a rythm to come out or ryhme... That is just me though so take it for what that is worth. Thanks for sharing your poetry.
    | Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by ashik | [ Reply to This ]


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