Drip drip drip
The sound of falling drops
echo in the next corridor
Silk falls against skin
grabbing and snatching at hair
Spiders leaving their nasty trails
Thump thump thump
My heart pumps through my shirt
causing waves of shock across my face
Scratching at invisible ropes
tying me down like clothy chains
my fingers feel like fire
Groaning under the fear
trapped in a fuzzy prison
I'm awake now.
Everyone stares at me.
| i've had this...wow...dreaming this same dream...covered in spider webs and dust like an old piece of furniture...scared to death, woke up scratching and clawing...and then sighing..|
you really capture this so well..
also reminded me of high school once...i fell asleep in class...and dreamt my mom was yelling upstairs for me to wake up for school...and i actually woke up in class yelling "yea, i'm up"
you could imagine the stares...
fun write, real write...
this could also apply to other things..just feeling entrapped by life itself...can't escape even in dreams...the bad things, the worries follow us and wrap their creepy silk webs around us, trapping us like flies.
|| Posted on 2011-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ] || Did you fall asleep in class? I remember I used to always fall asleep in Science and Math class. Sometimes when I'd wake up there would be drool all over my face and on the deak where my head was lying. Sometimes my hair would be wet with sweat and stuck to my face. I looked rather attractive at these moments. So glad to be in public among my peers in close proximity.||| Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by ssssss | [ Reply to This ] || it is unclear. and the last 2 lines make it weak.|
it would fit better if it was like:
or "Everyone's staring"
the things at the beginning seem unrelated.
|| Posted on 2007-12-22 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ] || i like the words you use but for me this wasn't very moving...you have potiential for greater writes....write something with a little more umph in it...if you nkow what i men..this was very interesting but the idea used too many times it was a little bland...but great words...that's what saved it....write another version on this same idea...diffrent way.....but that's up to you...it was good for what it is..but not something i'd read over and over||| Posted on 2007-12-21 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ] |