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    dots Submission Name: EDGESdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    When everything shattered
    There was no one to hear the breaking
    No hand to shield
    No revenge
    The blood collected in cloudy pools
    The sound eventually returned
    The little world I made up is still there
    It waits
    Just outside sanity
    I can always go there
    Leave the anger here
    And find a corner
    Bury my face in my elbow
    count the seconds till the pain goes away
    It will stop
    it always does

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