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    dots Submission Name: In my world.dots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    15/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 10/23/52
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsIn my world.dots
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    In my world there would be a purple sky and no angry voices in my ear.

    I would stay with you forever, under those beautiful stars.

    In my world the grass would be soft so I could lay here with you forever.

    When we're there, In my world. You could hold and protect me, no one would be there, only us and silence.

    In my world, the only fear I have is that I'll wake up.

    I woke up with another bruise, I'm afraid that one day my world will become real and I shall never wake and I'm not sure you'll be there with me.




    Submitted on 2007-12-21 23:06:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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