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    dots Submission Name: The bird who couldn't singdots
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    Author: Gothik
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 94/133/31
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 959
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this a few nights ago, while I was sleepless after a long fight with my mother... Long story... But at this time I felt so trapt around her... A lot of toughts came through my head at that time and I had to let them out or who knows what I could've done.

    Well, I hope you liked it and even if you didn't... who cares! :P


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    dotsThe bird who couldn't singdots
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    As the night slips away
    And the hours passes me by
    Silently my toughts turns grey
    In a soft agony, I let myself die.

    In this sweet surrender,
    Hatred starts taking over
    And my minds does even darker.
    I consume my soul through my inner fire.

    Trapt in this shell called life,
    Living in those filthy lies.
    Lying to my own self.
    Believing in those blue skies.

    Someday I'll set myself free...
    On this day I'll start a new life,
    Where I'll live my dreams...
    Where I won't see myself die.




    Submitted on 2007-12-22 13:52:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really beautiful babe, i loved the rythem. Sha' tem mo amour. and I know i misspelled that. hehe
    | Posted on 2007-12-24 00:00:00 | by x_Broken_x | [ Reply to This ]


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