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Don't Look at me


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 511
Class/Type: Lyrics /Depressed
Total Views: 764
Average Vote:    4.0000
Bytes: 3111



Description:




Don't Look at me



I'm three miles lost
of where i was meant to be
i would have taken my compass
but i decided to get lost intentionally
and sleep alone under the stars
next to a busy highway with no cars
cause nothing makes sense anymore baby
my life's become a circus act
with smoke, mirrors and crystal balls
and when i speak
i'm spitting the words with all destain
I'd tell you i love you but i'm afraid it's too late
and i'll just watch my life pass me by
through watery eyes that just won't cry
i'm handing you the shattered pieces of my black heart
take it and stab me, watch me bleed ash and dust
this is what you've made of me,
with your web of lies,
my love was the compromise
oh how it hurts.....

don't look at me...

You can whisper your lies
but no matter how loud you say it
it's still everything else but the truth
so bury your heart in a glass jar
and you can swear it till your dying breathe
"i never planned for things to get this far"

Did you think this could make things better?
A little white lie could never be blacker
and it's a shame for me in the end honey
in the end it's me who can't let go
in the end it was all just a show
what part of the game did i never get?
you can walk on me, take my pride and turn it into pain
and leave me with nothing left
except a stain in my memory
i gave you everything but everything wasn't anything for you
it wasn't enough my heart was in your hand
waiting for you to make a move
But you bluffed your hand, and bet it all on me
You were meant to roll a 7 but you rolled a 3
now i'm handing you the shattered pieces of my black heart
take it and stab me, watch me bleed ash and dust
this is what you've made of me,
with your web of lies,
my love was the compromise
oh how it hurts.....

don't look at me...

You can whisper your lies
but no matter how loud you say it
it's still everything else but the truth
so bury your heart in a glass jar
and you can swear it till your dying breathe
"i never planned for things to get this far"

it'll never be enough, that this is what happens
when you take a lie or two, and mix it with the truth

You can whisper your lies
but no matter how loud you say it
it's still everything else but the truth
so bury your heart in a glass jar
and you can swear it till your dying breathe
"i never planned for things to get this far"


don't look at me...
i think this is how i'll die
miserable and sad..
dying with all the pain inside...
oh the end is nigh




Submitted on 2007-12-23 05:01:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It has a lot of emotion and I like the rhythm. I almost feel the first ten-ish lines or so are too light for the rest of the composition.

Also, while the last paragraph isn't my personal favorite, the last line works perfectly with the rest of the piece.
| Posted on 2007-12-24 00:00:00 | by Morsketch | [ Reply to This ]


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