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Elusive..you


Author: N0shin
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Elusive..you



Oracles of the holy palm reminds me of you;
Beautiful angels of fire surround us
Awakening our deepest desires;virgin blue
In front of the eyes of our God
Delusions in the mirrors...
Us in a circle;are we to survive?
Raptures of the seventh heaven;
Raptures of the unspoken;
Attribution of the faintest beat of our hearts
Humming with the flow of tepid blood
Melting us; mollifying the saturn's divination
Another step to love..shall we?
Never letting a moment pass by...
Off we go
Ninth miracle in the making;off we go
In and through and through..
Elusive;what our love offers

Where have you been so long?




Submitted on 2007-12-23 12:16:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like how you use words(smile)
The flow of this poem was perfect!
Keep up the great work!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  i love u too! haha. dint know what else to say babe! others are sure as hell blind to what u have written and i was as well until u gave me a hint!
do me a favour...never ever delete this poem...even if things get....EMBITTERED, a'ight?

and about the poem? a lot of good vocab was used in this poem and that did make me feel like i was reading a superior human beings write ups but i could really relate to it...

this is sth i havent said in long: KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!!
| Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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