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    dots Submission Name: WATER FALL dots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsWATER FALL dots

    Our private symphony
    Your skin
    Water kissed
    I see me reflected
    for a moment we are one
    No words
    We donít need meaning
    Just heat
    Raw steam
    The love feeds itself
    Devouring the lust
    Make me yours
    just like that
    My Antony

    Submitted on 2007-12-23 15:24:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oooh, nice, I like it. I wish my other half was like that of this poem, there are some places,
    I don't wanna go. I would say but I don't wanna write ugly poetry.
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]

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