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    dots Submission Name: Guiltdots

    Author: Jay92
    Elite Ratio:    1.37 - 6/17/19
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    My soul burns inside with hate
    Hardening my heart
    I feel dead
    Smited out with guilt
    I yern for love
    And fight for it I do

    This pain I hide knows no boundries
    Pulls at me, sufficating me

    I gasp for life
    The pleasures of this world
    Only do I find hate
    And my own cruel ways
    Shunning those that hate

    It's digging in me
    Growing beneath my skin
    The weight is to much to bare
    Sinking me

    It kills to the soul
    And burns at the heart
    I created it
    With my selfish desires
    The pains of this world
    And its inhumane thirst

    This guilt is heavy
    Growing day by day
    Like veins
    Choking a once beatiful flower

    I am slipping to the dark
    Acking to be set free

    This guilt is sly
    Intoxicating me
    Killing me softly

    I need a breath
    It chokes me
    Wraps itself around me
    Taking me to my doom

    It grows and grows
    Guilt is strong
    It tells me to give up
    To take the plunge

    I can't let it win
    If not for me
    Then for those I love

    I must go on...

    Submitted on 2007-12-23 23:22:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Props. I dig your insight.
    | Posted on 2010-03-31 00:00:00 | by YC013 | [ Reply to This ]
      This guilt is sly
    Intoxicating me
    Killing me softly

    I can relate to this in many ways.. It's so hard to ease that pain of guilt.. I hate it when anyone puts me on guilt trips.. You can amlost litterally feel it shreading you from the inside out.. slowly ripping you to pieces..

    Good write..
    | Posted on 2007-12-24 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

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