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    dots Submission Name: Love Letter to an Exdots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 905
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 466



    Description:
       I was listening to an oldies song called ‘The Cream in My Coffee’ and I thought of the first two lines and ran with it… I like it.. I think of it as a love letter to an Ex.. I hope you enjoy it any and all comments would be greatly appreciated.. Thank you ^-^... Help my think up a better title please...


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    dotsLove Letter to an Exdots
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    You’re the cream in my coffee,
    (I like it black)
    You’re the man of my dreams,
    (I’m an insomniac)

    You’re the sweetness in my candy,
    (I like things sour)
    You’re the center of my world,
    (On the edge I am empowered)

    You’re the light of my life,
    (I lurk in the darkness)
    You’re the jingle in my bell,
    (I rather it be soundless)

    This is why we get along so well.




    Submitted on 2007-12-24 21:36:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think it's pretty cute.

    I know, cute is almost a ridiculous word when it comes to critiquing someone's writing. But cute is what came to mind.

    It would be a very cute song...lol.

    All in all, I like it. I can empathize and understand. I had an ex that I used to think of like this.

    Fortunately, I got over it.

    But, you did a good job.
    | Posted on 2008-02-23 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL. This is so funny, but at the same time I can empathize with the speaker. I think that you have done pretty marvelously so far, and while it wouldn't be bad with extensions, it also works well like this. I am for it either way. I can't think of anything that would be a better title, I wish I could. I think it's fine the way it is, although I was momentarily confused about what this was. i loved it though.

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Thnx for the thnx - This maybe just the place to share those bittersweet of Life lived and become a part of the thought provocing gendre.
    I alway keep in mind that any and everything happens in the mind before it realzes into fact. Thnx again. I will give attention to our endeavours. I like and appreciate your thoughts. Joachim.
    | Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Well you sure are contradictions. My ex passed away and I also have bitter-sweet memories. And memories are made of this. Choose well not hell! Joachim.
    | Posted on 2008-01-10 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool,I like the oppisites attract theme,it was really cool,
    | Posted on 2007-12-29 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      This could (or might) be a killer song. The imagery is brilliant with a hint of style- I like it. It's definately different. The duality of the lines is what hooks me to it- how it's not exactly the conventional thing you're talking about with each verse and stanza. All it needs in my opinion is to go on longer with more personal abstract observations. (Not really I like it how it is, I just want to keep reading em)
    Bah humbug (in lue of merry christmas)
    -Q
    | Posted on 2007-12-24 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]


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