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Submission Name: vine dots

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Author:	freeradical
ASL Info:	22/feline/london
Elite Ratio:	5.26 - 311/405/63
Words:	72

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	1341
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	555

Description:

vine

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i cling about you
like a vine
twisting, holding
pulsing.

i will drip off you,
dangle precariously
and threaten to fall
but remain
the same
and let you
drink me in.

long delicate fingers
tapping staccato
to a quickened heartbeart,
feet too tangled
together
to tap.

make me flow,
make me flower
and reach out
to touch your golden
skin.

i'm tired of this darkness.

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  this is a very sensual piece. its raw, almost brutal and sexy. there is a nice flow to this piece studded with certain enjambments.

i love the imagery you use here. its very bestial, dripping with sexuality. but its also, tender as in the way you cling like an Aerial root or an epiphyte - nucleus-like. ive written about the aforementioned terms in several poems and they always seemed to be the perfect image.

overall, very nice indeed.
-jp

come on over and take a peek at my latest. i would love to get your thoughts;)
| Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a very sensual piece. its raw, almost brutal and sexy. there is a nice flow to this piece studded with certain enjambments.

i love the imagery you use here. its very bestial, dripping with sexuality. but its also, tender as in the way you cling like an Aerial root or an epiphyte - nucleus-like. ive written about the aforementioned terms in several poems and they always seemed to be the perfect image.

overall, very nice indeed.
-jp

come on over and take a peek at my latest. i would love to get your thoughts;)
| Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
  wow. this is awesome. my absolute favorite part of this fabulous piece was
"make me flow,
make me flower"
It just sounded so great to me.

You have a lovely way with words
thanks for sharing

xoxo
| Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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