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    dots Submission Name: vinedots
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    Author: freeradical
    ASL Info:    22/feline/london
    Elite Ratio:    5.26 - 311/405/63
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1200
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 555



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    dotsvinedots
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    i cling about you
    like a vine
    twisting, holding
    pulsing.

    i will drip off you,
    dangle precariously
    and threaten to fall
    but remain
    the same
    and let you
    drink me in.

    long delicate fingers
    tapping staccato
    to a quickened heartbeart,
    feet too tangled
    together
    to tap.

    make me flow,
    make me flower
    and reach out
    to touch your golden
    skin.

    i'm tired of this darkness.




    Submitted on 2007-12-24 21:38:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a very sensual piece. its raw, almost brutal and sexy. there is a nice flow to this piece studded with certain enjambments.

    i love the imagery you use here. its very bestial, dripping with sexuality. but its also, tender as in the way you cling like an Aerial root or an epiphyte - nucleus-like. ive written about the aforementioned terms in several poems and they always seemed to be the perfect image.

    overall, very nice indeed.
    -jp

    come on over and take a peek at my latest. i would love to get your thoughts;)
    | Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very sensual piece. its raw, almost brutal and sexy. there is a nice flow to this piece studded with certain enjambments.

    i love the imagery you use here. its very bestial, dripping with sexuality. but its also, tender as in the way you cling like an Aerial root or an epiphyte - nucleus-like. ive written about the aforementioned terms in several poems and they always seemed to be the perfect image.

    overall, very nice indeed.
    -jp

    come on over and take a peek at my latest. i would love to get your thoughts;)
    | Posted on 2011-02-28 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is awesome. my absolute favorite part of this fabulous piece was
    "make me flow,
    make me flower"
    It just sounded so great to me.

    You have a lovely way with words
    thanks for sharing

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-01-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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