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    dots Submission Name: I Am.dots
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    Author: Sir Fusting
    Elite Ratio:    1.38 - 5/33/25
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Interpret it how you will, it's fun to see how people take it. Ignore any grammatical errors for now. Thanks,

    Dustin


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    dotsI Am.dots
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    I'm the void that completes your life,

    I'm the heart that burns for the night.

    I'm the soul that is wasting away,

    I'm the mind that has no place to stay,

    I'm the sickly, dirty, and also the poor,

    I'm the hunger that lies dormant on the floor.

    I'm the utopia that thrives on mistakes,

    I'm the contradictory statements you make.

    I'm the embodiment of all that is wrong,

    I'm the god that won't answer your calls.

    I am man, the finite, and also the friend,

    and while I'm the beginning, I'm also the end.




    Submitted on 2007-12-25 16:58:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Huh, well I loved how it rhymed(or had rhythm).

    Ehh, so you are everything and nothing?
    Well maybe not so much, since you go more into the negative(poor, sickly, finite, void etc) then the positive(god, beginning, heart).

    I thought it sounded like a bunch of random(but still relating) deep thoughts wound together by rhyme. It was fun and nice to read.
    thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]


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