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    dots Submission Name: Adrenaline Deficiencydots
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    Author: geekyslacker
    ASL Info:    28/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 64/41/14
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 1176
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 312



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    Listless,impatient waiting for something,


    Reflecting over the turns made and dishes served.


    Long hours are spent talking to inanimate objects.

    Lying awake where no one can hear,
    tell all to the pen at hand.




    Submitted on 2007-12-25 18:51:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like "Tell all to the pen at hand" ... the poets understand that one!

    Not many people can do that; you are really a national treasure, or at least you were, because after somebody tells us that, we are just another conceited person.

    I think I'm getting confused here, but that is not this poem's fault.
    | Posted on 2009-06-16 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the lines, Lying awake where no one can hear, impatient waiting for something, strange thought out sentices like that jump out at me, you made me think beyond something like there is something out there for you some meaning some happiness, kind of like longing i guess, good write,


    ty
    | Posted on 2009-03-20 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write, i didnt really read it but GREAT WRITE! well ummmm.....awsome
    we need to get grim's guts back!
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by Sodais | [ Reply to This ]
      true d@!!!...many can relate!!!....
    | Posted on 2008-09-24 00:00:00 | by Jaiknob | [ Reply to This ]
      dats nice yo. and definatly tru for the pen at hand anything can happen

    Fana
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the last line!...
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by Jaiknob | [ Reply to This ]
      Dudette.nice poem.

    | Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      very well composed...strong words and strong emotions..kepp up the good work:)
    | Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]
      yo mad cool write.

    its cool cuz its so insane its awesome.


    salaaam
    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      im not one for poems that don't rhyme. its nothing against its potency, i just never feel they flow. having said that i am very fond of the last line "tell all to the pen at hand." powerful wording directed at the perfect audience. well written.
    | Posted on 2007-12-25 00:00:00 | by dorianrydell | [ Reply to This ]


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