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    dots Submission Name: The Big Dreamdots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Big Dreamdots
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    Every so often, there comes a fool
    Who dreams too big and goes for the moon.
    With spirits high and confident
    He begins a journey that’ll never end.
    Through storm and sun he perseveres
    ‘till bones and dreams begin to wear.
    When all is lost but a drop of hope
    He wipes his sweat and carries on.

    Every so often, there comes a fool
    Who dreams too big and goes for the moon.
    His lonely path his only friend
    What’s left of him as good as dead.
    On every breath he slugs along
    And when at last all hope is gone,
    These poor fools still live on.
    Poor fools like Neil Armstrong!




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      I really liked that way it all came together.
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