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Just a litte more


Author: N0shin
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Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just a litte more



I've been meaning to tell you...
I've been wanting to let you know...
that you've got to cross the rivers;
You've got to travel a few light years;
You've got to save my soul;
You've got to try a bit harder.

I've been trying to show you...
I've been kissing to flow love in and out of you..
But you must know it's not forever that i want.
Hungry;Starving;Maddening
That's how my love is;
And you know you've got to try a bit harder.

There's always a magic between you and I.
The more i fly away the more you have to try;
The more love glitters the more it bleeds you dry;
Here i go again..
Hungry;insatiable;Maddening
That's how my love is;
Just know that you've got to push a little harder;
You've got to come down way stronger,
Just so we fall in love all over again..
hold on to me...just a bit longer.





Submitted on 2007-12-26 21:29:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This flowed very well. I enjoyed it and like whendt said it would make a pretty good song with the right music. Keep up the good work and normally I am not crazy about love poems because I feel it doesn't take much talent to write that kind of stuff but this is one of few exceptions where it did fairly well I liked it.
| Posted on 2008-01-01 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]
  Kind of like a song.
I liked this poem a lot!
Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  great poetry...this is what e'body will say coz it is a really awesome write up of urs... for once i am outta words!

KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!
| Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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