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    dots Submission Name: Dead Skindots
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    Author: EileenToTheLeft
    ASL Info:    28/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 16/36/55
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDead Skindots
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    Get used to it.
    So, this is why I'm here?
    To sit and watch
    this room stare back at me?
    It's more alive than I am.
    The dust, it settles and moves,
    settles and moves...
    and it's only my dead skin.
    Not to mention,
    there are voices echoing,
    "So and So has really changed."
    And my favorite,
    "What happened?"
    Nothing ever did.




    Submitted on 2007-12-26 23:03:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Get used to it.
    So, this is why I'm here?
    To sit and watch
    this room stare back at me?
    It's more alive than I am.
    The dust, it settles and moves,
    settles and moves...
    and it's only my dead skin.
    Not to mention,
    there are voices echoing,
    "So and So has really changed."
    And my favorite,
    "What happened?"
    Nothing ever did.

    a person as a spacial and emotional/mental prisoner. this piece ascends to the morbid and bipolar stream of consciousness. i think that this is for the most part well written. i think with some imagery that this can be a great write. you seem to have the talent; now just begin to write in some metaphors and such like.

    be well.
    -john-paul
    | Posted on 2010-07-09 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]


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