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    dots Submission Name: What Was It That You Asked?dots
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    Author: EileenToTheLeft
    ASL Info:    28/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 16/36/55
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhat Was It That You Asked?dots
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    He tried to look her in the eyes
    but she focused her sight on something else,
    further in the distance.
    Her hands white, knuckles showing through
    the flesh as though they were nothing but bare bones.
    They knocked on the table in front of her,
    rhythms heard hours earlier, yet still
    playing in her head like repeated words,
    repeated sentences that someone must have said.
    In the middle of his question,
    she stops and realizes what she is doing.
    A thought arises and she hears the words again,
    tap dancing, beating the syllables down
    into her subconcious memory.
    "I am crazy", she thinks.
    But the words repeat repeat repeat.
    He notices her knocking has increased.
    "Are you even listening?"
    Tap Tap Tap.
    And in her mind, the continued phrase,
    "I am not meant to be, I am not meant to be"
    Louder and louder.
    Her knuckles knock faster.
    He reaches across the surface of the table
    and tries to calm her hands.
    But, in the moment inbetween,
    the rhythm subsides and she moves
    to rest them on her lap.
    Then,with a monotonous tone, says,
    "What was it that you asked?"
    So, he speaks once more,
    "Why won't you even look at me?"
    She sighs,
    her gaze set on the floor.
    "I ache for something you could never be."




    Submitted on 2007-12-26 23:04:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the last part of the poem im sure youo know the part i speak of

    when she tells him why she doesnt look at him well about the poem it was thoughtful in al truthfulness it would take someon that has been in a failing relationship to understand

    so not everyone will be able to relate or comment on it just wanted to get that out there in case the lack of comments threw you off

    in saying that i can relate to this piece ... girl likes boy ...boy likes girl,girl wants to change boy,boy is how do you say elusive to this and girl doesnt know how to express that its over

    but all in all an okay read keep writing

    -the girl who cried wolf to much
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]


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