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    dots Submission Name: Didn't You Know This Nowhere Was Your Home?dots

    Author: EileenToTheLeft
    ASL Info:    28/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 16/36/55
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDidn't You Know This Nowhere Was Your Home?dots

    Sometimes it makes the blood rush from my face.
    Grounded. Loss of composure.
    Sinking human nature,
    my limbs become useless
    curled up on the floor.
    Eyes, searching the ceiling
    for a reason to get up.
    This Being is delusional over
    everything and nothing
    all at the same time.
    While they look down at me,
    too used to the familiar scene to show concern,
    they speak amongst themselves.
    Muted expressions but,
    in my mind, they sing,
    "Didn't you know this Nowhere was your home?"
    And, at that moment,
    I could feel my arms and legs
    becoming part of this post,
    growing into the hardwood planks.
    So, I agreed.

    Submitted on 2007-12-26 23:05:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure what to say without coming across as trite and slightly emo... but I'll say/write it anyway...

    You have a style which I admire... concise and fleeting, worldly yet abstract, and filled with imagery and emotion all at once. This piece speaks to me of the depression we all feel, especially so with creative types, I fear... that hypersensitiveness to everything around us which makes us quick to love and hate this world equally... and like a pendulum vibrating uncertainly between the two.

    While they look down at me,
    too used to the familiar scene to show concern,

    This part is wrenching... and makes me angry too, that people could become desensitised to it all... but, I guess... people harden when confronted by this over and over again. Hell, I've been in the same situation myself, and I still struggle at times, no matter how much I'll think this world is eternally beautiful the next day.

    I've read a lot of poems which try to portray this same feeling, but this one works. This hits deep.


    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]

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