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    dots Submission Name: Erasing The Paindots
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    Author: BlueTorcher
    Elite Ratio:    7.33 - 65/34/38
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 144
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1746



    Description:
       *NOTE*
    i do not cut and do not support cutting this is just something i wrote do not act on it or think that i do it since their are poeple who do


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    dotsErasing The Paindots
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    The silence still
    Like the world anew

    Back when a smile
    Was always on my face
    When it was so hard to erase

    Now the smallest thing
    Locks the frown in
    Making smiling seem like such a sin

    The days grow longer
    The nights brand new

    Even when I sit here
    Mourning for you

    Nothing eases my pain
    Not laughter or smiles
    Even though it would help

    If you stayed
    Just for a little while

    My thoughts grow dark
    My moods swings worse

    As if I've taken depression
    As a class course

    My body grows tired
    Of the hurt and the pain
    Hoping that its all,just a game

    I look to my right
    As it shines in the darkness
    The steel blade so fragile

    Yet harder than diamonds
    My fate rests in this
    Small piece of metal

    Scars it will cause
    But release it will give

    As I run the coolness
    Over my smooth shaven skin
    The first cut is painful

    Its stamped into my mind
    But soon time starts to fly
    As I feel the release it gives

    I look at my arm
    Streaked red with blood
    A frown appears across my face

    As I realize what I've done
    But now its to late
    The blood runs freely

    Now much more than before
    I become worried
    Wondering how much more

    My questions are soon answered
    As my vision starts to fade
    And right then and there

    I know that I had hit a vien





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    ||| Comments |||
      i love how you split some of the sentences up, it almost seemed like a dramatic effect. ecspecially the last line. It flowed wonderfully ^_^

    Cry
    | Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]



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