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    dots Submission Name: Seen a Pen Explode?dots
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    Author: Broken Halo
    ASL Info:    22/M/ID
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 20/44/64
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 102
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    Bytes: 619



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    dotsSeen a Pen Explode?dots
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    Put it in my mouth for our sake
    Ill be your eyes
    Open them in hindsight
    Still bleeding, still blind

    Set it to 'Cock' ready for it to release
    Quick pull now it again bleeds
    You know the pain; It tends to speak
    You stitch me closed but it will always seep

    Im still blind, tell me, was there blood?
    Lick it again, tend close the attempt to recreate
    Stich it clean, won't you stop the flow
    Forget hindsight, don't you see the hole
    Its now Whole

    Not your fault.
    Define Failure... Ha




    Submitted on 2007-12-27 02:57:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      im not the type to write "dark" poetry but i like to go mix up my reads and comments

    this strikes me as a sucide poem i hope im correct it has feeling to it but theres not really that much depth into it though

    i feel as though if you had only added abit more to it and increased the emotions taht speak out that you could have had something great on your hands ...but then thats only me

    by the way one positive thing i must say is you really had me seeing the poem so thanks for the read

    -the girl who cried wolf to much
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]



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