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    dots Submission Name: The Wandererdots
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    Author: Max Million
    ASL Info:    16/M/DRA
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 30/52/66
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Misc/Legend
    Total Views: 163
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1204



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    dotsThe Wandererdots
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    He walked onward, the sun his only companion. He walked onward down that lonely Arizona highway. His shoulder length golden hair swayed with the wind. He walked onward. His warn white sneakers standing out from his torn jeans and jean jacket. His brown backpack rested on his back. His sunglasses looked out at the world before him. His smile was sinister yet sweet. It was his smile, that was it. It said "Hey don't worry, it'll only hurt a little." The smile made you laugh yet cringe. It made you feel like he could be your best friend, but also made you wonder what horrible deeds he committed. Other than the unholy smile there was nothing dark about him. Beneath the jean jacket he wore an AC/DC shirt, Highway to Hell. His voice gave away his apparent age, med twenties, the voice of an angel:

    I get some headaches when I hit the heights
    Like in the morning after crazy nights
    Like some month in law in her nylon tights

    That smile. That smile that shakes the world. He walked onward, the world open to him and his smile. The world in his pocket. Behind him lay innocent blood, ahead of him lay the naive.




    Submitted on 2007-12-27 03:14:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. That was random.
    I like how you described the dude. Ultra cool narly awesomeness, man. I'm a little stupid but...I actually think I know what this means. It means that one should forget about their past and move on to the future, though still enjoying life itself. I dunno, I may be wrong. You put details in it and made me picture the scene in my head. Nice work.

    ~Beth~
    | Posted on 2008-02-02 00:00:00 | by crimson_panda | [ Reply to This ]
      I did like this one,from beginning to end,it was clever,"the sun his only companion",cool,
    "innocent blood behined him,Ahead of him lay the nieve" good stuff man
    | Posted on 2007-12-29 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


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