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    dots Submission Name: Der De Doo My Frienddots

    Author: insphered soul
    ASL Info:    19/M/ Hmmm?
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 450/382/94
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Isn't it hard to keep going day after day? When you already know what the future is going to be like but it just takes so much time for it to happen? That's how I feel, and this has nothing to do with that.

    Just thought I'd talk about how I feel :)

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    dotsDer De Doo My Frienddots

    I want to leave this place
    Go far away and be alone
    in a shack off the coast
    or a cave in the mountains

    I feel like I'm drowning
    holding on to reality
    watching it all fall apart
    as the enemy of my beliefs

    If I leave here now
    don't hate me ever
    just know that you
    were my inspiration

    Submitted on 2007-12-27 10:32:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay, i must add:

    The "Der de doo my friend" is not only annoying as hell, it's mispunctuated.

    If i skip over reading THOSE bits, i really like this poem.
    | Posted on 2008-03-05 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]
      mad cool poem. for the past few weeks ive been feeling like going to a desereted place with no people what so ever where noone can find me.

    it would be so nice. no pesky mortals..

    yo laterrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr

    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      ....this is retarded. lol.

    i like the last actual stanza i like though.

    it seems kind of angsty and emo. <_<

    whatsa matta fa' you?

    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]
      Your "Der dee doo my friend" line makes this seem like it's nonchalant and trivial, a "meh, whatever" type thing, but really, it's an illusion, isn't it? Or, at least, you show hope that's fast fading away, to be replaced by uncertainty and that feeling of wanting to escape. I feel like this a lot, that it'd be nice to be a hermit in a cave, but I think the reality would be much, much different--cut off from your friends and family, from real-life responsibilities... plus, I don't think there's much in the way of portaloos or showers in most inhospitable mountain ranges...

    Love and beliefs change. It's hard to stomach when your world seems like it's crumbling before your very eyes, I know, but things happen for a reason. At least, I like to think so.

    Anyway, about time I left you a comment...

    Take care of yourself, young man
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]

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