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    dots Submission Name: Where’s the love?dots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 959
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    Description:
       This is just a poem dedicated to my ex-girlfriend about our relationship and how she treated it.


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    dotsWhere’s the love?dots
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    She put it in her suitcase and walked out
    Just left me there standing
    Traveling from place to place
    Barely tending what’s inside the suitcase
    Trip after trip she begins to explore
    Town after town she wonders alone
    Leaving her heart elsewhere
    Taking away her dignity and self respect

    She got whatever she wanted, wherever she went
    Leaving cities with men gloating about the night prior
    With her face of orgasm feeding their pride
    Roaming around without meaning
    Giving me more reasons to terminate our relationship
    Allowing me to become expendable to her life

    She roamed often only to realize the truth
    She knew she belonged back home
    Walking through the door with her head down
    Telling me of the places she seen
    Adding fumes to this forest fire
    Burning a hole inside of my chest
    She left with the suitcase
    But came back empty handed




    Submitted on 2004-06-26 01:52:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      another v. good write, you obviously have a talent for capturing your emotions and wording them so perfectly, keep em coming, and i look forward to reading more of your work x x x x
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is well written and has meaning to it. I like the last two lines but I'm not sure why. It was a good poem and it certainly made me want to keep reading.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by sadistchild | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. This poem has a depth to it that's refreshing and real. After reading this poem, I'm curious about the others! Keep up the good work, and keep on writing Byes~
    <3 Jade

    p.s. Love is a painful thing. I can relate with you when it comes to things like this, or at least I think I can >.< Hope you're ok now~
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by RealityTears | [ Reply to This ]


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