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    dots Submission Name: Salamedots
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    Author: NoMartyr
    ASL Info:    18/M/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 33/80/68
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 231
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 272



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    dotsSalamedots
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    "Salame"
    I heard her say
    “Enjoy your stay?”
    And we embraced
    Our return from the light

    "Salame"
    I heard her say
    “Enjoy your stay.”
    And I turned away
    And returned to the light




    Submitted on 2007-12-27 15:18:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    makes me think of the end of the light concept you know your times up dont go towards sthe light whole thing well anyway

    Kinda short as far as poems go but everyone has there own style thats what makes our job intresting diffuclt and unique all at the same time

    one question though at the end it says

    " "Salame"
    I heard her say
    “Enjoy your stay.”
    And I turned away
    And returned to the light"

    does that mean that they both returned to the light or only Salame did? any way thanks for posting

    -the girl who cried wolf to much
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by BlueTorcher | [ Reply to This ]


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