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    dots Submission Name: Regrettingdots
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    Author: WhY-dO-yOu-CrY
    ASL Info:    20/F/ConnUSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 149/111/95
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Society
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    Have you ever said 'I love you' and never really meant it.

    I have, and oh how I regret.

    I don't like to abuse those words, because they are more then just words.

    They're meant to be the sun, to brighten your loverís day

    They're meant to be the acknowledgment of a parents love for their child.

    They're words to say as you watch your grandfather lowered into his permanent bed.

    I do regret saying things I don't mean, that I don't feel.

    But if it makes people happy...

    Like my great aunt, who I barley know and who barley knows me, smile like she won the lottery,

    Then Iíll commit the crime of the one thing I regret the most.




    Submitted on 2007-12-27 16:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       Well, you do have a great talent for writing anything. Your writing does get me though.
    In all of the relationships I've been in, the guy wants to say I Love you the very next day. Whether they meant it or not, they just wanted me to say it right back. I don't though. It seems that everyone I've said I love you to, they leave in some way. Whether they leave(like my mother) or they die(like most of my family, whether to cancer or some sort of disease). I can't stand it.
    After a month or two, I got tired of them hounding me to say it so I made the biggest mistake of the relationship, I said it. Wouldn't you know, they left before the end of the week. Know, I'm afraid to say I love you to anyone any more.
    "They're meant to be the sun, to brighten your loverís day." That's true and it is written in a nice way. Words compare to the sun, it makes it sound even greater.
    "They're meant to be the acknowledgment of a parents love for their child." My parents never said I love you to me so, I can't relate to this line in anyway but, I do know what you mean by this.
    "They're words to say as you watch your grandfather lowered into his permanent bed." My grandfather died before I was born but, I watched my Aunt get buried. She was cremated and when the people put her ashes in the ground, she landed on their foot and they kicked her ashes. I almost punched the person but my sister stopped me. I cried for weeks.
    Well, keep on writing. You're really good.

    ~Samantha~
    | Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by The lost child | [ Reply to This ]


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