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    dots Submission Name: who will save me from myself?dots
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    Author: Faith-Elisabeth
    ASL Info:    16/f
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/1/4
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotswho will save me from myself?dots
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    we were so close to the edge
    planning on jumping together
    then she came and looked into your eyes
    i jumped alone that night

    they were so close to my lips
    we were going to take them together
    then she whispered i love you
    i died alone that night

    the gun was cold in my hand
    we were going to end it together
    but she came and saved you from death
    who will save me?





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