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    dots Submission Name: Egotistical Bullshitdots
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    Author: insphered soul
    ASL Info:    19/M/ Hmmm?
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 450/382/94
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
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       I know someone is gonna raise an eyebrow over this, but think what you will.

    That night gave me alot of inspiration.


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    dotsEgotistical Bullshitdots
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    Why did I ever agree to this? All this egotistical bullshit she keeps about herself just makes it even worse. Her ever recurring facism on her feelings pretain to a love that was once there but no longer exists. But when you stare at me across the seat of my truck how can I not feel the pang of desire, of lonliness. And you just keep looking away while my thoughts richochet off the endless boundary of my mind that says "No, don't go there, it's not worth it". But how can I not? When your hand is oh so close to mine?




    Submitted on 2007-12-27 18:20:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awe soul... this piece is lovely. Its so touching and awesome and stuff.

    gud job dude.(=


    rip n rot
    Grim




    | Posted on 2008-02-04 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw... well I can't say I understand the title, but I found it sweet. I understand how it is not wanting to go backwards, especially when you know for a face that it's a dumb idea. As for the piece, I can't say much about it, not knowing if it really is a real piece or just a small rant, but it certainly did evoke emotion out of me, so it did it's job as art. That's all I have I guess.
    Happy Hols,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      *sigh*

    who is this about?

    this makes me feel all giddy inside ^_^


    anyway, in this line:

    "can I not feel the pang desire, of lonliness. And you just keep "


    i think you mean "pang OF desire"
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]


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