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    dots Submission Name: Hulk Wordísdots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 1060
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 767



    Description:
       This poem is my most purest and vivid form of anger and hatred. I focused on someone that I completely hate, and wrote exactly what I felt at my peak moment. I rarely feel this way towards anyone else.


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    dotsHulk Wordísdots
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    I want tears to fall from your eyes
    I want blood to rain from your flesh
    I hate you
    I hate you
    Iím happy your father died
    I wish it was me that killed him
    I if i had three wishes you would:
    die
    burn in hell
    then die again
    Why did you have to be my brother
    Why did you have to ruin my life
    To me your Godís first mistake
    A huge waste of skin and life
    170 pounds of phecies rolled up into a human being
    A worthless soul
    Your a horrible brother and an even worse father
    If you canít raise emí donít help make emí
    Your scum
    Not even filth, just plain out scum
    And go ahead and call me a monster
    You helped me to become one




    Submitted on 2004-06-26 02:49:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If you have to rant, just don't call it poetry. I can understand that you may feel this way towards someone, but I would have kept the comment for the person intended. Hate mail is not something that's any fun to read surreptitiously, it just leads to indigestion.
    | Posted on 2004-06-28 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats a lot of hatred to burn inside of everyone, just glad your venting it this way and not...yeh. You definetly put your hatred and remorse for him into this piece and it showed through, but still, as I said, thats a lot of hatred to burn inside of someone.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]
      Wo! I truely feel your hatred. Love the bit about wasting flesh and skin etc. Good word choice. "God's first mistake" too makes a fantastic impact. Nice Write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow... damn... thats pretty hardout... good venting... i hope this made you somehow feel better. the image of blood raining from veins was very original (or atleast i aint ever read it before!) i think 'phecies' should be 'faeces' but other wise wow... im glad you dont hate me...
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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