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Submission Name: How long dots

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Author:	Dispair
ASL Info:	28/m/qld
Elite Ratio:	1.93 - 15/38/35
Words:	115

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	731
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	678

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How long dots

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How long would you leave it
Living a life that is a lie
Living a life with me
Living a life that pleases you not

Would you leave it till we were gray
Would you leave it till love was no option
Would you leave it till I chose to leave
Would you leave

I know how you feel
And I know what your thinking
I too have been where you stand
At the point of no return

Why lie
I don’t yell
Why hide
I don’t seek

Life unexpected plays a hand
A hand that leaves us both
I can go, I won’t stay
I’ll be leaving you today

Submitted on 2007-12-28 08:03:27 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Your poem was excellent. When I read it, it shows me a lot of emotion. I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by The lost child | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.