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    dots Submission Name: How longdots
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    Author: Dispair
    ASL Info:    28/m/qld
    Elite Ratio:    1.93 - 15/38/35
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 731
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 678



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    dotsHow longdots
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    How long would you leave it
    Living a life that is a lie
    Living a life with me
    Living a life that pleases you not

    Would you leave it till we were gray
    Would you leave it till love was no option
    Would you leave it till I chose to leave
    Would you leave

    I know how you feel
    And I know what your thinking
    I too have been where you stand
    At the point of no return

    Why lie
    I donít yell
    Why hide
    I donít seek

    Life unexpected plays a hand
    A hand that leaves us both
    I can go, I wonít stay
    Iíll be leaving you today




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      Your poem was excellent. When I read it, it shows me a lot of emotion. I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by The lost child | [ Reply to This ]


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